So I said I wanted to post something, since I have not gotten anything up lately. I didn’t really get as far as I wanted on my main project so I took a few days off, and worked on a side game. So I will post that. It isn’t finished but there is a lot of content in it. It is a game about being an ooze and your twin sister ooze!
Warning, you play the bad guy and there is naughty situations including killing people and raping some people.
The beginning could really use a rephrasing, after all it gives the first impression and the first two sentences share some words. Even my language teachers told me to avoid doing that.
I fixed it. You don’t need to convince me, since it was definitely a typo hehe. Well I don’t know if you call that a typo, but basically when you write a sentence or two out but you change your mind and you rewrite it, but then forget to delete part of the old sentence.
Still feels bad to correct someone who writes, can I call it professionally?
Especall when I passed the literature test at the end of high school with exactly as many points as I required to pass XD
Well if you are a professional you should listen to feedback. Besides, I know there are likely issues since the game is just a first draft. A lot of the short games, are just first, since I don’t have a lot of time to go through and polish them all up(though I do try to edit as I go to some degree).
Heyyyy, that’s a little different from usual!
The viewpoint I mean, playing as the monster, and one that can potentially be transformed even further!
And mmmm I do love the way you explore some of the more exotic ways ooze girls can interact with each other, being born from a mother’s breast, fusing with each others breasts/genitelia and making them bigger, turning their lewd nature/personality into weird powers they can fight with, mmmm very good~! <3
Would be fun to see what possible Bad Ends you could think up for these ooze girls, since I think you write the kinkiest kinds of situations, ones that make the reader feel utterly helpless and endlessly horny as they're trapped in whatever depraved form they succumb to. <3 (The Collector's Trophy from Transformation Freak comes to mind, or the many, sweet bad ends in AI Freedom Act!)
Good job with this story!
An excellent start. Apparent from some typos and coding issues, this is shaping up to be an intriguing story. Really like how you’re taking it from another perspective and throwing in some bizarre and exotic transformations. Hope to see this expanded upon.
I’m never too tired for a Lily story 😄